Last week I sat beside Drayton and watched him go through copy written by one of his clients. Keep in mind this piece of copy wasn’t bad.
Drayton just sat there, in front of his screen, and edited it with such ease it was amazing.
By the time he finished, it was a masterpiece.
Best,
Rezbi
www.eadim.com
www.commonsensedirectmarketing.com
Filed under Clayton Makepeace, copywriting by on Jun 22nd, 2010. Comment.
In copy one of the worst things you can do is to drag on about irrelevant things.
This is a mistake I always made before Drayton kept drumming it into my head. I guess I still do make this mistake, but not as much as before.
As David Ogilvy used to say, “You can’t bore people into buying your product. You can only interest them in buying it.”
Best,
Rezbi
www.eadim.com
www.commonsensedirectmarketing.com
Filed under Drayton Bird, copywriting by on Jun 20th, 2010. Comment.
Do you suffer from a crippling condition called deadline panic?
I do – and it attacked me with some ferocity recently when after a few glasses of cheering sangria I looked at my schedule for the week.
I was immediately reminded of a maxim by one of my old bosses: “Whatever you’re doing, you should have started sooner” – Bill Phillips.
Bill Phillips ran Ogilvy & Mather when I sold my old agency to them, and we both like quotations.
(One of his I particularly appreciate is “A neat stall is the sign of a dead horse” – and if you saw my desk, you’d know why)
Anyhow, I realised with some alarm that I was going to Bucharest and Kiev that week to do 4 seminars, one of which I hadn’t written yet.
Since it takes a couple of days’ work to put together a good talk, this was quite a worry, so I started going through possible material.
And by chance I found one or two good quotations. Here is the man who wrote the first:

Did you recognise him? It is Evelyn Waugh, one of the great comic writers of the 20th century, and a wonderful stylist.
During the Second World War he and his wife used to write to each other and on one occasion he wrote complaining about how dull her letters were.
“A good letter is like a conversation,” he wrote.
This reminded me of a meeting I had with the managing director of Mercedes Passenger Cars about 17 years ago when we started doing their direct marketing.
He was concerned about the tone of their copy – and in fact that is why we got the business.
We talked about this for a while, then I said,
“Have you ever actually sold cars?”
“Yes” he said.
Then I asked: “Did you talk to your customers the way you’ve been talking to me?”
“Yes.”
“Well,” I replied. “That is the kind of tone your direct mail should have.”
The difference between good copy and so-so copy is largely about tone. Of course, few writers even understand the basics, but even if they do most write with a sort of half-witted enthusiasm, where everything is “fabulous” and “exciting”. So the copy lacks credibility. Readers say, “Oh, come on.”
The really good copy is conversational in tone, and is adapted to suit the context
Read your copy out loud. Does it sound like someone talking? It should.
And does it sound like typical “sales” copy any one of your competitors could run. It shouldn’t.
The other thing to watch out for is that the language must be appropriate to the writer – and the recipient.
If you’re supposed to be the chairman, write like a wise and friendly adviser. If you’re writing to another chairman, write as an equal. If you’re supposed to be someone who handles complaints, adapt accordingly. And so on.
It’s deceptively simple – but not that easy to do. You just have to work at it.
Best,
Drayton
P.S. This is number 25 of Drayton Bird’s 101 free helpful marketing ideas. You can sign up on the link below for the rest.
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Filed under Drayton Bird, copywriting by on Jun 13th, 2010. Comment.
If you follow all these disjointed ramblings you know I vented a little spleen last week about an e-mail I got, and said I would run a series of webinars on better writing.
- Many people realise that bad writing holds back careers, plays havoc and bedevils business.
- The people who want to improve are often the people who are good already. The useless carry on regardless. So, the good get better and the bad fall further behind.
- Quality matters more than technique. If what you offer is appealing even bad writing, within reason, won’t kill it as long as the benefits are clearly described, which they were in this case.
Ross was a gloomy nit-picker, hardly ever satisfied, and with little apparent sense of humour. On the rare occasion when he saw a contribution he liked he would murmur, “I am encouraged to go on.”
Well, I am encouraged to go on – I have a few other subjects that may interest you like positioning, fund-raising, briefing, research and testing, brand building, how to present, how to be a good creative director, creative analysis and so on.
Let me know if any of those sound interesting, please – or if you have any other suggestions.
I will now prepare the better writing webinars. They will chiefly be concerned with writing to persuade – but cover everything from what to do before you write and how to manage your time to how to get ideas, with advice on better writing from George Orwell and much more.
So if more of you are interested, let me know that too.
Best,
Drayton
Websites: www.commonsensedirectmarketing.com / www.eadim.com
Filed under Drayton Bird, copywriting by on Jun 10th, 2010. 1 Comment.








